Hello and welcome to my running commentary comment, where I tell you all my thoughts as I'm playing to give you as much feedback (and hopefully entertainment) as possible. (Spoiler warning for other players)
As someone who has made a "Which Character Are You?" quiz for my VN, to see someone else build one into their actual game honestly feels so good. Was the first thing I clicked on, it was very good thinking to have a question prompting whether I'd played yet & redirect me back to the menu. Now I'm even MORE invested in playing, bc I want to take the fun little quiz at the end.
My first thought as I begin: oh no this relationship ๐ฌ (extremely real tho.)
I'm so used to fictional depictions of plurality having the first alter be a voice of reason, and at first Lila sounds very much like one...but no. Lila, come on. Neither of these clowns is completely wrong but GIRL we gotta up our standards. Lila no. (Anyway the way you write plurality is much more realistic and refreshing, which. I have a guess as to why. And I appreciate that you are writing these stories and sharing them.)
that very real thing of "help me" "why do you need help? Are u mad at me?" LIKE!!!...I have a friend who used to talk just like that. It is so silly. Not to live with, insecurity and anxiety are a bitch, but just objectively (and especially in fiction rather than real life)...I can't help but find it funny. And it happening even during a very desperate bodyhorror pleading for help moment adds layers that the incidental comedy kinda intensifies? Anyway i like it
The situation of desperately asking someone for help, being told help is coming TOMORROW, and then having that followed up with "well. guess I need to clean my room now' is just. auuuugh. I love absurdity in horror. This is so kafkaesque fr. The most kafkaesque writing I've ever seen, outside of Kafka. (I have always wanted a modern Metamorphosis. This rules.)
"I came here to get laid, not to, fuckin--I don't even know what you wanted from me!" girl she told you like five million times, she wants you to help her. Girl. Girl please.
Oh my fucking god I evaporated her. She was apparently so hot and now she doesn't have a body at all. Damn...
god dammit cloud gf can still talk
SHE DOESN'T EVEN KNOW LILA. smh she vouched for you and everything..... (also I fucking love this post-cloud conversation. Very absurd circumstances for a very real conversation, feels extremely realistic to stories I've heard from my fellow plural peeps and their exes/bad friends.)
Me as soon as the neighbors started knocking at my door: man I hope I get to disintegrate them (and then I did!!! This game gives me everything I want)
did...did Lila fronting just as the transformation started...make the transformative power (whatever that is) consume & change Lila?? Black Cat wearing Lila's 'skin' (voice, ig?)??? I am spinning theories around in my head
Beth. Beth, why did you not raid the fridge before running? Beth. Beth please.
I love how lavender-text's first line ("Poor thing..you're rotting") is so genuinely comforting, and is immediately followed by something far worse. Beth I feel you so much rn.
oh my god she said like 2 more things and the vibes are SO bad, Beth get out of here Beth noooo
...okay so the vibes are still weird, but now I'm starting to like the nurse. Not trust the nurse, she feels like some kind of weird chaser maybe. But she's intriguing. All her reactions to things are novel. I like how she describes things. I enjoy her.
Okay Lila is apparently still here. Hm. Can't get a read on her ๐๐
I DON'T WANT TO EAT THE NURSE. Unless she's into it, which tbh I could see her being.
"There was a little piece of her that wanted to see what that smile looked like after she had been bitten into" I love this line
oh. oh uh. After that choice between love and food, uh. Things are progressing very rapidly. (<- frightened delight)
What I'm realizing in the middle of these love confessions is that Beth still doesn't know the nurse's name. And immediately there was so much unease. Which is cool. I like the ways in which this game makes me uncomfortable. (speaking of which--time to reload and eat her)
I FUCING KNEW SHE'D BE INTO IT
ohhhh but this writing. To be fueled with hunger for the only person in recent memory to give her understanding and compassion because she's "starving. She didn't realize it before, but Beth needed food badly" ......METAPHOR. metaphor!!!! Jumping up and down about effective use of metaphor!!!
okay. Great game. Very satisfying game. I feel like the toxic relationship and the nurse bit wove together and informed each other so well and I love it. But now's the moment of truth. Now I get to DO THE QUIZ (I love this mad carnival-esque music in this menu wwwww)\
oh my god, I'm the nurse. I didn't realize that's exactly what I wanted until I got it. I will brag to my friends that I got the best result in this quiz! This game knows me so well. 10/10 this ruled
thank you so much for playing my game, and wow! your commentary was so much fun to read! :D im glad someone picked up the chaser vibes from the nurse lol. and its good to hear im not the only one to think of a character quiz, great minds think alike :)
really enjoyable. encompasses a specific kind of dread i often feel when i'm in a certain mental state. the girlfriend reminded me of myself when i was young and before i was medicated and gave me a lot of anxiety HAHA (positive). really wonderful vn. so menhera
Ohhh this is the kind of queer horror that I love to see, where the real life conversations and relationships induce more dread in me than the body horror. Those online convos felt uncomfortably real, and they made me wince a few times.
The prose for the rotting and the entire relationship between her and the nurse were a delight to read, and I loved the look of the backgrounds and the music!!!!
It's Kafka's The Metamorphosis but menhera and with toxic yuri.
Joking aside, I enjoyed this VN quite a bit~ It's always nice to see some realistic plural representation, and the writing of Beth et al's online girlfriend in particular was notably good—so much so that it hit rather close to home, heh.
10/10 loved the soundtrack and backgrounds, really felt lila and beths dynamic, and, christ her gf felt real.
scoring the nurse in the quiz felt great tho i dont have an income so i think i cheated, or maybe the nurse's love transcends employment, in which case, switching my twitter avatar asap
thanks so much for playing!!! glad you enjoyed!!!! great taste in music btw, and excellent quiz pull (if i say so myself); nurse love energy is a metaphysical quality beyond mere employment, tho it is not beyond quiz cheating, so who can really say :P
โ Return to rot
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Hello and welcome to my running commentary comment, where I tell you all my thoughts as I'm playing to give you as much feedback (and hopefully entertainment) as possible. (Spoiler warning for other players)
As someone who has made a "Which Character Are You?" quiz for my VN, to see someone else build one into their actual game honestly feels so good. Was the first thing I clicked on, it was very good thinking to have a question prompting whether I'd played yet & redirect me back to the menu. Now I'm even MORE invested in playing, bc I want to take the fun little quiz at the end.
My first thought as I begin: oh no this relationship ๐ฌ (extremely real tho.)
I'm so used to fictional depictions of plurality having the first alter be a voice of reason, and at first Lila sounds very much like one...but no. Lila, come on. Neither of these clowns is completely wrong but GIRL we gotta up our standards. Lila no. (Anyway the way you write plurality is much more realistic and refreshing, which. I have a guess as to why. And I appreciate that you are writing these stories and sharing them.)
that very real thing of "help me" "why do you need help? Are u mad at me?" LIKE!!!...I have a friend who used to talk just like that. It is so silly. Not to live with, insecurity and anxiety are a bitch, but just objectively (and especially in fiction rather than real life)...I can't help but find it funny. And it happening even during a very desperate bodyhorror pleading for help moment adds layers that the incidental comedy kinda intensifies? Anyway i like it
The situation of desperately asking someone for help, being told help is coming TOMORROW, and then having that followed up with "well. guess I need to clean my room now' is just. auuuugh. I love absurdity in horror. This is so kafkaesque fr. The most kafkaesque writing I've ever seen, outside of Kafka. (I have always wanted a modern Metamorphosis. This rules.)
"I came here to get laid, not to, fuckin--I don't even know what you wanted from me!" girl she told you like five million times, she wants you to help her. Girl. Girl please.
Oh my fucking god I evaporated her. She was apparently so hot and now she doesn't have a body at all. Damn...
god dammit cloud gf can still talk
SHE DOESN'T EVEN KNOW LILA. smh she vouched for you and everything..... (also I fucking love this post-cloud conversation. Very absurd circumstances for a very real conversation, feels extremely realistic to stories I've heard from my fellow plural peeps and their exes/bad friends.)
Me as soon as the neighbors started knocking at my door: man I hope I get to disintegrate them (and then I did!!! This game gives me everything I want)
did...did Lila fronting just as the transformation started...make the transformative power (whatever that is) consume & change Lila?? Black Cat wearing Lila's 'skin' (voice, ig?)??? I am spinning theories around in my head
Beth. Beth, why did you not raid the fridge before running? Beth. Beth please.
I love how lavender-text's first line ("Poor thing..you're rotting") is so genuinely comforting, and is immediately followed by something far worse. Beth I feel you so much rn.
oh my god she said like 2 more things and the vibes are SO bad, Beth get out of here Beth noooo
...okay so the vibes are still weird, but now I'm starting to like the nurse. Not trust the nurse, she feels like some kind of weird chaser maybe. But she's intriguing. All her reactions to things are novel. I like how she describes things. I enjoy her.
Okay Lila is apparently still here. Hm. Can't get a read on her ๐๐
I DON'T WANT TO EAT THE NURSE. Unless she's into it, which tbh I could see her being.
"There was a little piece of her that wanted to see what that smile looked like after she had been bitten into" I love this line
oh. oh uh. After that choice between love and food, uh. Things are progressing very rapidly. (<- frightened delight)
What I'm realizing in the middle of these love confessions is that Beth still doesn't know the nurse's name. And immediately there was so much unease. Which is cool. I like the ways in which this game makes me uncomfortable. (speaking of which--time to reload and eat her)
I FUCING KNEW SHE'D BE INTO IT
ohhhh but this writing. To be fueled with hunger for the only person in recent memory to give her understanding and compassion because she's "starving. She didn't realize it before, but Beth needed food badly" ......METAPHOR. metaphor!!!! Jumping up and down about effective use of metaphor!!!
okay. Great game. Very satisfying game. I feel like the toxic relationship and the nurse bit wove together and informed each other so well and I love it. But now's the moment of truth. Now I get to DO THE QUIZ (I love this mad carnival-esque music in this menu wwwww)\
oh my god, I'm the nurse. I didn't realize that's exactly what I wanted until I got it. I will brag to my friends that I got the best result in this quiz! This game knows me so well. 10/10 this ruled
thank you so much for playing my game, and wow! your commentary was so much fun to read! :D im glad someone picked up the chaser vibes from the nurse lol. and its good to hear im not the only one to think of a character quiz, great minds think alike :)
really enjoyable. encompasses a specific kind of dread i often feel when i'm in a certain mental state. the girlfriend reminded me of myself when i was young and before i was medicated and gave me a lot of anxiety HAHA (positive). really wonderful vn. so menhera
also the quiz was so fun! i got black cat
thanks for playing! glad it was a good reaction you had to the gf ๐ and nice job getting the hardest quiz outcome!!
Ohhh this is the kind of queer horror that I love to see, where the real life conversations and relationships induce more dread in me than the body horror. Those online convos felt uncomfortably real, and they made me wince a few times.
The prose for the rotting and the entire relationship between her and the nurse were a delight to read, and I loved the look of the backgrounds and the music!!!!
thanks so much for playing! glad you enjoyed the kind of horror i had to offer :3c along with everything else :D
It's Kafka's The Metamorphosis but menhera and with toxic yuri.
Joking aside, I enjoyed this VN quite a bit~ It's always nice to see some realistic plural representation, and the writing of Beth et al's online girlfriend in particular was notably good—so much so that it hit rather close to home, heh.
Very nice work~
Thanks for the kind words and for playing! Glad the plurality resonated, sorry the online gf did too (แต—แด—)
i got the nurse
yooooo nice :) thanks for playing!!
fav song: sex lol
10/10 loved the soundtrack and backgrounds, really felt lila and beths dynamic, and, christ her gf felt real.
scoring the nurse in the quiz felt great tho i dont have an income so i think i cheated, or maybe the nurse's love transcends employment, in which case, switching my twitter avatar asap
thanks so much for playing!!! glad you enjoyed!!!! great taste in music btw, and excellent quiz pull (if i say so myself); nurse love energy is a metaphysical quality beyond mere employment, tho it is not beyond quiz cheating, so who can really say :P